Revision Plan

My revision plan is to build up the thesis of my paper. The purpose of my paper is to argue how the devices of teaching impact a students enthusiasm in the topic. I encountered the same artifact in two separate incidents. One time the artifact was received well, while another it was received poorly. I would like to flesh out the analysis in my paper, and add more quotes from authors Freire and Cronon. Finally, if proper, I could potentially add a third narrative experience in between the two narratives to connect the concept.